I don't think there's anything wrong w/ Neal at 11. Frankly I think he's a bit of steal there. If Crosby and Letang are healthy the penguins PP will be clicking even more efficiently than last season. He was top 2 in shots last season, could have a healthy dose of PIMs and go plus. That's all your forward categories except face offs, and he might have dual eligibility on the wings.
Subban was a great pick, and goalies are always a wild card. Luongo/Kipper could be a dynamite starting pair or could flame out spectacularly (no pun intended).
I like your late picks of Semin and Clowe, they should both be solid depth guys for you if injuries flare up.
I don't like your bottom 2 d-men, souray and bogosian (just because of bogosian's injury, i think he'll be the Jets best d-man in a two years). Is anyone available on the free agent wire? John Carlson maybe?
All in all, good draft, especially for a first year. Good luck!